"Sammy continued to cry, only to stop when Annie smacked her three times with her right hand. "Shut. The. Fuck. Up.""
clearly she smacked her four times.
"After a few breathes to calm herself, she opened the bathroom door, and strolled out, down the hall, and across the living room to the table sitting next to her cage."
omg, "breath*"
does anyone have any suggestion where to cut when i submit stuff to the nifty story page? i could just do 1-4, the original story, which is all they have there now.
but, like, "candle" is pretty important
and so is "breakfast"
"birthday" is kind of next, but "exercise" is kind of a better story.
i want to do it this weekend, but it'd be great if someone had an opinion to share. i'm thinking through breakfast. it sets up the story, alters it, moves to a new town, and then settles into a safe landing.
No suggestions yet, as I "re-discovered" your stories thanks to a (rather screwy) upload chez Nifty. Had you bookmarked at the BDSMLibrary, but there's only 3 stories there.
ReplyDeleteGoogled you and saw you're also at Literotica and found out "The Exhibition" had more parts and that you had a couple of other stories too, so, I'm first going to go through those.
Love your work and I seriously like the deeper recesses of the darker parts of your mind :D
Oh, just one more thing (and a suggestion after all): to upload (if you don't have italic or bold text parts) copy/paste your text to Notepad (or the Mac equivalent) and upload that one. Some site related software doesn't always agree with the layout of Sicromoft Word or other word processing software...
Read you around, Sammy_808,
JJ
hi, hope you enjoy stuff here. i hope you found the story page on the right side bar. it has all the parts of all the stuff i still promote. that's where my stories start, in any case.
Deleteand yeah, that nifty upload was "screwy" because some jerk took my story and formatted it like an idiot, and then submitted it. they said i could send in a new, better one, but i need to figure out where to cut the story. i think i'm pretty sure on "breakfast" right now, i just need to take my files and smoosh them together to send in.
like. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
my mind is kind of constantly fucked up, due to the depression and anxiety. so. "[liking] the deeper recesses of the darker parts of [my] mind" just reads as "i enjoy when you talk about cutting yourself." probably not what you're going for, so, fyi.
whatever, i need to fix that story so people who email me about it are at least reading something i wrote, and not some fucking messed up abortion of my story.
Hey Sammy, to be honest, I've enjoyed High School Story a lot more. Are you planning to continue/expand it?
ReplyDeletenope. that's done forever. i occasionally think about deleting it from bdsmlibrary when people mention it, because it's painful to read now. i wrote it when i was still actually in high school, scribbled out in the back of old english notebooks (why does every class claim you need a notebook, but then you only end up ever using like half of it at most?). i've thought about rewriting it to not suck, but i can't even get the stories i want to write to come out right now.
Deletebesides, bdsmlibrary is so bad about things, it probably wouldn't get deleted even if i asked.